Asttle Writing - The day things started disappearing

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING
The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs.

WALT write a creative narrative story!

Once upon a time there lived a nite named ser knight Jesse and one day I heard a wispier but know body was there so I just said its provably just the wind and then I heard the wispier again its probably just the wind again so I had a look outside and saw nothing the day after my couch disappeared and then my TV disappeared things started disappearing what time is it my clock had disappeared Oh no!!!

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My Persuasive Writing Plan

  

1. WALT plan our persuasive writing on a JAM board.

My Lockdown Bubble

WALT share details about our ‘Lockdown Bubble

First Draft - Mahuika Show.

 Once upon a time Kahu was chasing Sissy because Sissy was being silly and then Kahu and Sissy had found a magic Kete and the magic Kete turned there Nan into a piece of coal and Kahu and Sissy said to the magic Kete can you turn my Nan back but the magic Kete could not turn there Nan back only Mahuika could but can you tell us  where Mahuika is. yes I can tell you where Mahuika is so they went are we there yet no we still have to get the past Pukeko where all most at the pond you did int tell us your name my name is Potiki the last burning finger nail are you really the last burning finger nail yes said potiki.

Next steps

• Re read each sentence - does it make sense?
•  Re-craft - how can you improve your writing?
• What details could you add to elaborate on the story.
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your spelling errors.
  
  
  
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My Mum

WALT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

My Mum has greenish blue eyes. She has blond hair and red streaks.She has whitish red skin. My mum is a super duper Mum.

She likes to message people on her phone and talks for hours and hours. She likes to have walks with us and I try to beat everyone. She always does yoga in the morning that is this om-mm om-mm. She always has a cup of coffee before we go to school and it wastes our time.

We make really big delicious fluffy pancakes together. We all so make chocolate chip cookies together. We have walks together too. My mum is the best mum ever because she makes the really really really delicious dinners. 

The Great Reading Adventure

 We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'.

We had finally arrived at our Assembly so I jumped in my costume and got ready for the show. When the music went on I felt really nervous and very shy. I was scared when I had to kneel down up the front of the assembly and then I went up. I saw ropes that hooked me. I had to wave my hands around and around Then I said what are you doing let me go and then I said stop stop I will go more slowly.

Tsunami Evacuation

 We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience. WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully.

First Draft

Last Friday we were typing out free writing Friday and then we heard an evacuation saying there might be a tsunami coming to crush us so we went up the hill. It was hard to walk up the hill and then we stopped for morning tea and then we went to the top of the hill and stopped for lunch and then the teacher said there is no tsunami so we went back when we got back I saw Dad so I got in the car and then we Drove back home!!!

Tractor Trek

We wrote a recount about our Tractor Trek experience. WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully.

Last Friday lots of big tractors came to Paparore School . The tractors had people inside and they let us play in the tractors and then they were going to have a  talk about why they did bring the tractors. They  brought the tractors because they thought  they would make us really happy and I was happy about it too.

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All About Me Poem

 Learning Intention - I am learning to add details to my writing.

I wrote a poem about myself and whanau.